• Oleksandr ValiusOleksandr Valius, almost 4 years ago

    I can say you know clever words, but use them wrong. This is not an art, not postmodernizm and not iconoclastic.

    18 points
  • Matt KMatt K, almost 4 years ago

    Iconoclasm is about overthrowing popular ideas or institutions; destroying sacred imagery. Does a design helping rights holders 'increase on-site revenue' qualify?

    Actually, it might be iconoclastic in that it's destroying the popular idea of a festival being wild, free and fun. Nothing evokes Woodstock like 'Revolutionise compliance by increasing control of key components.'

    More seriously:

    • The geometric elements, gradients and overall composition are fine, though not really a new take. Or postmodern. That's okay though as new takes are hard, and postmodern design has been watered down for so long now it's hard to tell what it is. Unless you're Neville Brody or were a member of Memphis, it's not really Postmodern with a capital P...

    • Colours could use more contrast. They're good, but the heavy use of blue makes it fairly one-note. Some white space would help a lot.

    • Typography needs attention. The left-centre-right text alignment idea doesn't work, it just makes it harder to read. It might have been better if the titles and subtitles were aligned with the text, keeping them centred is an odd choice.

    • There are capitalisation issues. C of Convenience vs. the other subtitles?

    • Paragraph spacing is too wide. It looks like a double line break, whereas it would look better being narrower, especially for text that probably should be bulleted.

    • What's it for? Is it a poster, a flyer, a web page? Who is it aimed at? As a festival goer I'm not sure real-time tracking of my every move would be a major selling point...

    I hope I'm not coming across as overly harsh here - the design is mostly there, it just needs more thought and attention to detail.

    7 points
  • Oliver Swig, almost 4 years ago

    Whats the concept? The type is set really weird. Pick an alignment and use that, right now the rag is all over the place. Looks like a junior graphic designer made it.

    Start with an idea, not trends.

    7 points
  • Thomas Michael SemmlerThomas Michael Semmler, almost 4 years ago

    Doesn't look very new to me. Predictable, considering the trends. It is yet another interpretation of what is currently dominating the visual design space.

    Also, are you sure that you used iconoclastic correctly? :/

    1 point
  • Ben MJTBen MJT, almost 4 years ago

    On what planet is this postmodern?

    0 points
  • Erin GwozdzErin Gwozdz, almost 4 years ago

    Conceptually I think it would make more sense for this to be three posters, or maybe one poster and two types of supporting materials for rights holders/sponsors. Having all the information on one poster is really bizarre to me, as Matt mentioned in his "What/Who is it for" point.

    0 points
  • sean lionin, almost 4 years ago

    Love the shapes + gradient !!!

    0 points