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Ask DN: Destroy my Portfolio

over 5 years ago from , UX Designer

Hi guys,

I've been meaning to update my portfolio for a while, and even though I already have a laundry list of things to improve, I thought it would be a fun exercise to have DN rip this version to shreds.

So please, tear it apart as much as you want — layout, copy, portfolio pieces, shitty code, ugly avatar, you name it.

No need to be nice about it, either. Give me your worst.

http://danielfos.co

39 comments

  • Pasquale D'SilvaPasquale D'Silva, over 5 years ago

    Dude, you're asking what most designers are too fucking scared to ask, and for this, hat off to you.

    My feedback:

    Most of the points I'd raise seem to be covered, but I'd point out hierarchy as the most wobbly theme of all. In general, my eyes struggle to determine what is the most important information on the page. It could use a very broad pass of this thought.

    9 points
  • Phil RauPhil Rau, over 5 years ago

    Incredibly lackluster.

    8 points
  • Jordan FlaigJordan Flaig, over 5 years ago

    Has more of a developer feel to it than it does designer.

    8 points
  • Daniel GoldenDaniel Golden, over 5 years ago (edited over 5 years ago )

    I'd love to know your rationale behind this post, but I'll bite. Your portfolios not terrible, but if I were you, I'd improve it by thinking about the following:

    • You're making viewers work to hard to read the text by constantly centering it. There's no consistent place for your eye to return to after you reach the end of each line. Some centering is ok. Always centering is bad practice.
    • Why not make the links to your projects more enticing by including a small thumbnail/preview of the project as a part of a larger link?
    • Why a light grey background?
    • What is the point of your portfolio? For me to get in contact with you to inquire about a potential project, to view your past works, etc? Whatever the point is, make the action you want your visitors to take very apparent. There's no clear call to action here.
    • You have an awesome name. Kudos to your parents.
    5 points
    • Daniel FoscoDaniel Fosco, over 5 years ago (edited over 5 years ago )

      This is excellent feedback. I had heard some of it before, but altogether it makes for a concise list of priorities. Thank you!

      You have an awesome name. Kudos to your parents.

      Hah, and thanks for that :) I'll make sure to search for a great domain name before having my own kid.

      0 points
    • Daniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      Also, the light grey background is just to avoid the harshness of pure white... it's more of a "why not" for me, but I'd love to know if there are any arguments against it.

      3 points
  • Drew PickardDrew Pickard, over 5 years ago

    There's a lot of talk, but not much work.

    The screens are UI light, we can't get a sense of interactivity, the images are tiny.

    3 points
    • Daniel FoscoDaniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      There's a lot of talk, but not much work.

      Yeah, it's a bit too chatty perhaps. I have to police myself when it comes to this.

      Gotta work on the interactivity as well, a little bit of flair is always a nice touch. Thanks!

      0 points
  • Jim SilvermanJim Silverman, over 5 years ago

    womp womp.

    scrollbars

    3 points
  • Chris CChris C, over 5 years ago

    "I work closely * small clients" – *with

    2 points
    • Daniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      I'll fix that one as soon as I stop sobbing uncontrollably.

      3 points
      • Elizabeth AdamsElizabeth Adams, over 5 years ago

        Also, just from a language-y perspective, "I work with small clients" makes me think that you work with short/skinny/tiny people. I usually say something like "small business clients," even though most folks know that's what you mean.

        0 points
  • Dallas BarnesDallas Barnes, over 5 years ago

    Overall I would just say there needs to be a focal point on your portfolio's homepage, something that's dominant. Right now there are a few things that are fighting for attention that all feel of equal importance (headline, photo, projects).

    2 points
  • Ed AdamsEd Adams, over 5 years ago (edited over 5 years ago )

    I like your sunglasses. No real critique.

    1 point
  • Tristam GochTristam Goch, over 5 years ago

    The centred single column of text reminds me of reading poetry at school.

    1 point
    • Daniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      That's a beautiful way to say someone's portfolio is terrible.

      Thanks, re-thinking the layout is pretty much the first item in the to-do list by now.

      3 points
  • Elizabeth AdamsElizabeth Adams, over 5 years ago

    I think most of the biggies have been mentioned here already, but I'd throw in a thought about reevaluating the visual harmony that you have going with the typefaces that you've chosen.

    I can't quite tell if the visual confusion I'm experiencing is more because of the centered-ness of your text or the fonts themselves, but I'd suggest playing with different/new pairings of your header and body typefaces, fewer colors (the red/orange thing is sort of confusing-- are they all links? are none of them links?), and a better distribution of font sizes across your headers.

    Also-- I agree about the remark w/r/t the sunglasses, and your avatar just seems to me to be too dark. Can't see you!

    0 points
  • Sjors TimmerSjors Timmer, over 5 years ago

    Ok :)

    • Nice for you to live in Rio, how is that helping me?
    • You hide your face behind sun glasses, would you do business with a guy who's wearing sun glasses?
    • Why does red text mean important, but yellow text clickable links, make it clear, make your strengths bold and your links underlined, it's not a puzzle
    • What's with the align:centre, don't you know that's harder to read?
    • A spelling/grammar error in the first line? are you crazy?

    Ok, that was my worst, the good news is this page is already a lot better: http://danielfos.co/swerve-app/ clear heading, clear menu, copy that tells a story, make your front page more like that :)

    0 points
    • Daniel FoscoDaniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      A spelling/grammar error in the first line? are you crazy?

      Yeah, I'll never forgive myself for this one.

      Thanks for the (many) tips and for the kind words as well :)

      0 points
  • Felipe DutraFelipe Dutra, over 5 years ago

    some links are broken, like "download my CV"

    0 points
  • Ricardo NunesRicardo Nunes, over 5 years ago

    The yellow links / text should not be yellow or that bright. It's hard to read. Here is a nice follow up to help you out:

    http://webdesign.tutsplus.com/articles/an-introduction-to-color-theory-for-web-designers--webdesign-1437

    There are some other issues, but I will leave it for the other guys.

    Boa sorte ;)

    0 points
    • Daniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

      Will soften the yellow a bit -- and re-read some color theory in the process of remaking the color palette.

      Valeu :)

      0 points
    • Daniel GoldenDaniel Golden, over 5 years ago (edited over 5 years ago )

      The issue isn't that the links are yellow, or "that bright", the issue is that there's not enough contrast between the link and the background color for sufficient legibility. If the background color was black (which I'm not recommending as a solution), yellow would work fine.

      @Daniel, I'll point you to Lea Verou's contrast ratio calculator. It's very helpful when determining whether there's enough contrast on your text for the web.

      1 point
      • Daniel FoscoDaniel Fosco, over 5 years ago

        Thanks for the link, Daniel. Will play closer attention to readability — one looks at his own portfolio for so long that the words become imprinted in his mind and readability stops being an issue.

        0 points