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Show DN: 5 months ago you gave me great advice on my start-up video. What do you think of the new version?

over 6 years ago from , Co-Founder/UI Designer at 900dpi

5 months ago I asked DN for feedback on a video I had created for my new company. Nine of you gave me advice on how to change the video. Based on your feedback I think the new version is way better.

What do you think? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f5GHat7ljJ4

14 comments

  • Alyssa Pelletier, over 6 years ago (edited over 6 years ago )

    Holy cow, what a difference! Huge improvement, really great video. Love the colors and simplicity!

    Edit – I checked out your site too. Only one observation: I can see the stock lines on the iMac image you're using! You're targeting designers, and they'll definitely pick up on that. Honestly I might choose not to use a service over something like that. From my perspective, what else did you guys skimp on? Attention to detail is key. Luckily it's an easy fix. :)

    4 points
    • Abby Larner, over 6 years ago

      Thanks so much for the feedback. We definitely purchased that image, but must not have gotten replaced somewhere along the way, so we'll get on that quickly :)

      1 point
  • Kyle PapkeKyle Papke, over 6 years ago (edited over 6 years ago )

    This is way better. I like the text animations.

    I think you could change up your demo sequence order to cut it from 40+ seconds down to probably 20 seconds like this...

    1. "It's as easy as this!"
    2. "Add html/css to Dropbox"
    3. Cut to dragging the files into Dropbox folder
    4. "Your website is online"
    5. Cut to the 900dpi Dashboard
    6. "Add this class to edit your site"
    7. Cut to sublime text and add 900-edit class
    8. Cut back to Dashboard and show editing & update

    Also, for the screen cast of dragging files into dropbox, cut it from 10 secs to 5 secs or less of the 'action' shot. And for editing the html in sublime, make it faster and don't record a typo ;p

    You can keep the intro & outro sequences the same, I just felt that the middle portion of demoing the product could be more cohesive. This will make the whole video faster and smoother in my opinion.

    2 points
    • , over 6 years ago

      Thanks! I'll definitely look into fixing that.

      0 points
      • Kyle PapkeKyle Papke, over 6 years ago (edited over 6 years ago )

        I edited my post to add an idea about reordering the product demo sequence

        0 points
    • Adam Nelson, over 6 years ago

      I dunno, I thought the typo gave it character / authenticity.

      1 point
      • Kyle PapkeKyle Papke, over 6 years ago

        In some situations, that's good, such as watching a screen cast of someone coding a tutorial project. but this video is a short clip to demonstrate the product in a professional light. that was my understanding.

        1 point
  • Pierre de MillyPierre de Milly, over 6 years ago (edited over 6 years ago )

    Hey, it's way better indeed.

    Still, there's one simple thing that you could do to make it WAYYYY better:

    • add a voice :)
    2 points
    • , over 6 years ago

      It's interesting that you say that because we actually had a voice in one of our iterations, but decided against it because we thought it broke up the flow. Out of curiosity, what do you think the value add is for a voice?

      Thanks!

      0 points
  • Cole RobertsCole Roberts, over 6 years ago (edited over 6 years ago )

    A major improvement. Nice work, Abby!

    1 point
  • Kevin RabinovichKevin Rabinovich, over 6 years ago

    I think some of the "slides" with the steps on them took a little too long to transition to the next part of the video.

    1 point
    • Abby Larner, over 6 years ago

      Thanks. Timing has definitely been one of the aspects most commented about on this video. I'll have to make the transitions a little better.

      0 points